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"Evangeline! It's time to get up!" Mom called from the hallway. I grumbled and pulled the blanket over my head. Just five 더 많이 minutes... five 더 많이 hours would be nice...

"Evan," my older brother Joshua poked his head into my room. "Didn't 당신 hear Mom? 당신 need to get up." I growled at him.

"Get out," I squeezed my eyes shut tighter.

"Why don't 당신 try and make me?" he taunted. I grabbed my 베개 and flung it across the room at him. He laughed and ran out of the room. Not having anything to rest my head on now, I got out of 침대 and got dressed. I got downstairs just before Mom was about to explode again.

"Why must 당신 stay up so late?" Mom complained. "Maybe if 당신 didn't, it'd be easier to get up in the morning." I grabbed an 사과, 애플 out of the basket on the island and shrugged.

"Sorry, Mom. I'm a teenager."

"So that means 당신 make stupid decisions?" Joshua asked, already to go to school, with twenty 분 to spare. I narrowed my eyebrows at him.

"What about you?" I questioned.

"I'm turning eighteen in less than two months. I'm basically an adult now," he countered. I rolled my eyes at him at sat at the table. My twelve 년 old sister, Sophia, smiled at me from across the table.

"What's he going on about now?" she signed to me. I gave her an exasperated look.

"Same old, same old," I signed back to her, mouthing the words. "He thinks he's such a big shot." Sophia rolled her eyes and nodded.

"I saw that," Joshua stated. He went to the living room. I flipped him off as his back was turned. Sophia laughed. "Y'know you're gonna be late, Evan, if 당신 don't hurry up." I stuck my tongue out at him, then quickly ran upstairs to brush my teeth and hair. I had about two 분 left 의해 the time I was putting on my socks and shoes. "Evan! Hurry up!" Joshua called from downstairs. "Or else I'm leaving without you!" I gave up on tying my shoes, grabbed my bag, and ran down the stairs. I got to Joshua's car just before he was about to ditch me."You know, 다음 년 you're not going to have me to drive 당신 to school. You'll have to take the bus, which as 당신 know, comes a half 시간 earlier."

"Oh, please, you'll still give me rides.. It's not like you'll have anything better to do."

"Um, college?" he reminded me. "Remember? I'm not gonna be home." I bit my tongue, but tried to appear unemotional on the outside.

"You really think Bailey's okay with 당신 leaving?" I asked. "She's the best thing that ever happened to you, and you're just gonna leave her?"

"I'm not leaving her," Joshua snapped. "We talked about this... I'm going out of state for just a couple years... We'll visit each other. Then once I graduate, I'll come back and we'll be together." I folded my arms and stared out the window.

"Sure."

***

I ditched Joshua at his car once we got to school and headed to my locker. There, I met up with Brynn and Camden. Brynn was leaning against the locker 다음 to mine, a nearly dead look on her face.

"What's your problem?" I furrowed my eyebrows.

"Wait for it..." she muttered.

"Evan!" Samara's voice shrieked from down the hall.

"Brace yourself," Brynn grumbled under her breath. Samara slammed into me; I nearly fell into my locker. Her attack soon turned into a hug as she excitedly jumped up and down, squealing with joy.

"OhmyGod! Guess what?!" she trilled.

"What?" I asked, a little worried.

"I got my license!" she shouted.

"Oh really, that's so cool!" I grinned. I looked back at Brynn. "So what's your problem?"

"Try having to listen to her go on and on about it the whole ride to school..." she sighed. Samara rolled her eyes, unphased 의해 Brynn's 쓴, 쓰라린 response.

"Oh, she gave 당신 a ride to school?" I asked. Brynn nodded, and pretended to twirl a small flag.

"Yay me..."

"Yeah, I would've picked 당신 up too, Evan, but 당신 kinda live out of the way, and I know Joshua gives 당신 a ride---"

"It's okay," I nodded. Something about Brynn's morbid attitude told me I would've not wanted to deal with Samara's perkiness this morning. Usually Brynn's not like this until after her math class.

"So, how about we go somewhere fun tonight?" Camden suggested. "Now that Samara's got her license, we can go have some fun!"

"Don't 당신 need an adult with 당신 for the first year?" I asked. Samara rolled her eyes.

"Oh please, Evan. No one follows that rule. Besides, I'm a great driver! Right, Brynn?"

"No comment," Brynn replied.

"I guess that sounds like fun," I shrugged.

"Yeah! We can go downtown and see a movie, 또는 something!" Camden decided. We all nodded in agreement. The warning 벨 rang. I turned to head to class, when someone ran over my foot.

"Ow! Dammit!" I jumped out of the way too late. It was Destery, the school loser and nerd. He's in a wheelchair, which isn't the reason I hate him. He's just so damn annoying when he runs your 나귀, 엉덩이 over.

"Sorry!" he called. "I'm gonna be late!" He rolled down the hallway, barreling through other kids' paths. I clenched and unclenched my toes inside my converse. Damn, that hurt!

"You okay?" Samara asked. "That kid needs to watch where he's going."

"What that kid needs to get a life," Brynn shook her head. "God, he's such a nerd! He's always correcting Mr. Thorsen in History, like he lived it 또는 something. He's so damn annoying. Maybe if he put down the frickin' encyclopedia and made some friends--"

"But who would want to be 프렌즈 with him?" Samara reminded her.

"True," Brynn shrugged.

"Come on," Camden smiled. "We're gonna be late." We all left and went our separate ways to class.

***

I sat on the 후드 of Joshua's car, grumbling impatiently. School had gotten out almost ten 분 ago, and yet he still hadn't shown up. If I'd known he was going to take this long, I would've just gotten a ride with Samara and Brynn. Finally, after what seemed like forever, he showed up.

"Okay, you're always giving me crap about being late to stuff," I called out to him as he got closer. "Yet look at you. What the hell took 당신 so long?" He unlocked the 트렁크 and threw in his backpack, then headed back to the driver's door.

"I was working in the tutoring center fourth block. Miranda needed my help... And get off the car," he sighed, exasperated. I hopped off the 후드 and got into the passenger's side. "Any plans for tonight?" Joshua asked casually. "Like studying for your math test?" I glared at him. My algebra teacher, Mrs. Waller, also teaches his AP Calculus class. He's such a nerd and always has to try and keep tabs on me when he can.

"I studied during lunch," I lied. "I'm fine. I'm going out with my 프렌즈 tonight, which 당신 should start doing more."

"I'm going to be graduating this year, Evan. I need to keep my grades up." Please. He's a freaking genius. Joshua sighed. "So what're 당신 guys doing tonight?"

"We're going downtown to see a movie," I replied. "Samara got her license."

"Oh, that's cool. One of her parents is going to be there, right?"

"Yeah...?" I tried to play it cool. "Isn't that the law?" He smiled and nodded.

"Just checkin', sis."

When I got home, instead of doing my homework, I threw my bag into my room. I'm sure I'll have enough time tomorrow to do it. If not... Oh well. I collapsed onto my bed, deciding to take a little nap. Before I could doze off, though, I heard Sophia come in. She frowned at me and sat in the 콩 bag chair in the corner of my room. I rolled onto my side.

"How was school?" I signed.

"It sucked! I hated it!" she signed back. "Why did Mom and Dad have to put me in public school? I want to go back to my old school!"

"They want 당신 to be able to have 더 많이 friends. And it's only been a few months."

"I know! But the other kids still make fun of me! They don't know I can read lips." I sat up in bed, and patted the 좌석 다음 to me. She got up and sat there.

"Just don't listen to them," I signed to her. She raised an eyebrow at me like, Really? I rolled my eyes. "You know what I mean." At least that got her to smile. "You're way 냉각기 than any of the other kids. They just want to make 당신 feel bad. Don't worry, someone will notice how special and sweet 당신 are, and they'll want to be 프렌즈 with you. Because 당신 are awesome." I tapped her heart.

"Thanks, Evan," she signed. She had a sheepish smile across her face.

"Anytime." She stood up and hugged me, then left. A few 분 later, I could feel the 베이스 from her room shaking the floor. Mom and Dad had her room sound-proofed so she could play her 음악 as loud as she wanted. I couldn't hear it, but I could still feel it slightly. She likes being able to feel the music. Her taste is a bit much for me.

We didn't end up eating till almost 7, when Samara was supposed to pick me up. I quickly gulped down my food.

"Geez, slow down, Evangeline!" Mom scolded me. "You're going to make yourself sick!"

"In a hurry somewhere?" Dad asked.

"I'm going out tonight," I replied."We're going to the movies."

"Samara got her license," Joshua added. I clenched my fork. Somehow I wasn't sure how this would go over with Mom and Dad.

"Good for her," Dad grinned. "There's going to be an adult there though, right?"

"Yes," I said uneasily. Thankfully, Mom and Dad didn't notice. My cellphone buzzed. It was from Brynn: Hurry up! "I gotta go," I said quickly. I put my dishes in the sink, grabbed my jacket, and ran out the front door.

"Be safe!" I could barely hear Mom call after me.

I got into the backseat with Brynn, with Camden in the front 좌석 다음 to Samara. Samara turned around and grinned at me.

"Ready? This is going to be so much fun!" she squealed. She carefully pulled away from the curb then zoomed down the street.

"Samara, be careful!" I warned. "My parents think your parents are with us! That's gonna be hard to believe if 당신 destroy the neighborhood!"

"Oh, relax, Evan! I'm a great driver!" Samara rolled her eyes at me in the rearview mirror. I sighed and leaned back in my seat.

"Hey, maybe we could go pick up some guys," Brynn laughed.

"Gee, what am I?" Camden remarked.

"Like maybe Mason?" She eyed me, a devilish grin on her face. I rolled my eyes.

"Shut up. I don't like him anymore." I looked out the window, so she wouldn't see my cheeks turn pink. It was true though. I didn't like him anymore... At least not as much as I used to. Brynn laughed, but fortunately dropped the subject. We drove for about twenty minutes, getting closer to the edge of town. Just as we were about to pull onto the highway, Samara slammed on the brakes. My hands shot out in front of me, bracing myself. Brynn, however, had fallen asleep, and collided with the front seat. She fell back in her seat, now fully awake.

"What the fuck, man!" she screamed. "What the hell was that?!" We watched as the man on the motorcycle sped away, thankfully unharmed.

"Geez! Didn't he see us?" Camden retorted. We looked to Samara, who looked like she'd just seen a ghost. "Samara. 당신 okay?"

"...Yeah," she shook herself awake.She carefully pulled out onto the highway. Brynn rolled her eyes and tried to go back to sleep. Camden looked back at me and laughed.

"Damn, that was close," he chuckled.

"Shut up, Camden," Samara griped. "Ugh, I hate driving on the highway... People are such dumbasses." We drove on the highway, carefully, for about a half hour, until we got into downtown. We drove around the parking lot of the movie theatre for a while, until we found a spot. Samara ran over the curb as she pulled into the spot, but it didn't do any damage. Brynn clapped her hands.

"Brilliant," she said darkly. "Excellent job, Samara." Samara sighed and pulled off the curb.

"Shut up," she grumbled. "I bet I drive better than you!"

"I never said 당신 didn't," Brynn shrugged. "Why do 당신 think I don't have my license?" We all got out and headed inside. Tonight's showing: The Woman In Black.

***

After the movie was over, we all ran out back to Samara's car. I got into the passenger seat, while Camden took my seat.

"That was awesome!" Camden hollered. "It was so scary!"

"No it wasn't," Brynn disagreed incredulously. We ignored her. Samara backed out of the parking spot. "Careful, careful, careful, careful," Brynn repeated over and over in a monotone. "Samara! Watch out for that child!" Samara stopped to turn around and glare at her.

"Brynn! Shut up!" she shouted at her. "You're making me nervous!" Brynn grinned.

"This was fun," Camden said. "Next time we should go into the city 또는 something." I un-clicked my seat-belt to turn around to talk to him. The whole night was lit up with neon signs, and probably thousands of other cars' headlights. We smoothly pulled out onto the highway, backed up in traffic.

"Ugh, we're never gonna get home!" Samara grumbled. As we came to an intersection, we waited for our chance to go. We watched as car after car passed us, leaving us no chance to turn onto the main road. Cars behind us started honking. Brynn flipped them off through the rear window. I leaned my cheek against the head rest of my 좌석 and shook my head at Camden. This was going to take forever...

"Samara, can't 당신 just go?" Camden asked impatiently. "People are starting to get real pissed off. Samara gripped the wheel, looking almost sick.

"I'm trying!" she said through her teeth. "They're not letting me through!" Finally there was a break in the cars speeding past us.

"Just go!" Brynn shouted anxiously. Samara floored it on the gas and pulled out.

"Samara! Watch out!" Camden screamed. I looked out my window as a blinding light made me freeze. I didn't even have time to scream. The sound of the impact was deafening. The crunching metal and shattering glass pierced my eardrums. I felt the car flip over, and over, and over. The small fragments of glass licked tiny cuts all over me. I couldn't see anything. I felt the wind flying past me, and I knew I was no longer in the car. My body slammed onto the cold, wet pavement, and slide across. My first thought was get out of the road! But I couldn't move. I could taste blood in my mouth. I laid there, sore and motionless on the road, as the beat up, metal scrap of what was left of the car barreled towards me.

I closed my eyes.
posted by sadiebugz00
In class we had to say if we would be a protagonist 또는 antagonist in what genre? This is what I put.

I would be the protagonist in a realistic-fiction novel because I would want it to be sort of realistic, but not completely. My character's name would be Sage, she would have electric 라임 green eyes, and fiery red hair. I would want to be Sage because, 1, I 사랑 green eyes, 2, I 사랑 red hair, and 3, I like the names Lily, Luna, and Sage. Sage would have a funky-fun, colorful personality. She wouldn't be perfect, but have enough spunk and spirit to keep moving on. Her 가장 좋아하는 color would be an electric blue, and she would 사랑 fried chicken. Her two best 프렌즈 would be named Luna and Lily.





[i]Sorry if ya didn't like it, it might seem trashy to you, but that's okay! Everyone's got an opinion.
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posted by Problematic129
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    Alex
    “Okay, so nothing bad has happened, shouldn’t we be happy?” Iris asked.
    I shrugged. “I just can’t stand waiting.”
    Stilere picked up the stone. “The stone stopped glowing.”
    “Maybe it’s resting,” Iris suggested.
    “Yeah, stones should totally rest.” Stilere said, shaking her head.
    Right now it was just Iris, Stilere, and I, looking at the glowing stone. Trying to…I don’t know,...
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Music: Never Alone 의해 Lady Antebellum. Relay for Life 2012 Luminaria Ceremony, in Los Alamitos, California.
video
songs
entertainment
break
lady antebellum
sad
touching
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posted by alicia386
August 24

      "But I can't," sputtered Eric.
      "You can and 당신 shall," replied his mother. "Mrs. Sanders has to defend a client today and poor Chloe has no way of getting to school. 당신 have a car so take her. What is the big deal?"
      The big deal is that he gets nervous whenever he is around her. She is probably sick and tired of him anyways. She must hate him since he is dating Shea. "I can't," he said once more. He had to think of a really good excuse. "Shea might see us and get the wrong idea."
      "Then I will talk to her about it," said his mom.
      Arguing would...
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posted by alicia386
August 23

      "Wednesdays are crap," muttered Chloe. Actually everyday seems like crap to her. Not only did Blair stop speaking to her, she also started to pretend that Chloe wasn't even there. Chloe would walk 의해 her and try to start up a conversation but Blair would always be with a friend. It was annoying. 
      "Isn't someone in a pleasant mood," said Derek as he plopped a 좌석 right 의해 Chloe. She ad been sitting at an empty table. No one wanted to sit with her not even the special Ed kids. 
      Chloe was use to Derek's charm 또는 so she thought. He had been flirting with every...
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posted by Problematic129
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    Stilere
    “Easy does it,” I said as I helped up Iris into the car, who was now shaking.
    Mikey got into the back with her, to comfort her, while I went to the front to drive the car, while I was driving my mind swirled from one topic to the other.
    Iris, Alex, and I, we’ve been 프렌즈 for awhile. Iris was best 프렌즈 with Alex’s cousin, and I was 프렌즈 with Iris so we all hung out. Alex tagged along, much to his cousin’s chagrin, and then one 일 his cousin had left us and we were just stunned....
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Prim caught a bus to Stoke Hall, where she would supposedly meet the make-up artist she was to be the apprentice of for the day. Prim knew it was childish, but she was excited. Nothing could stand in her way. Maybe the beautition would be so amazed 의해 her talent, she would offer her a job. Prim would never have to go to school again. And no 더 많이 of Hope's wheedling...
“Oh, crap.” Prim cursed, moving to the front of the bus. A quick word with the driver and she was off, running back towards the Stoke Hall. Trust her to miss her stop! She might just make it, if she hurried..-
“Hi.” a red-haired...
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posted by TheEvilHoodie
French Pancakes
A pancake, smothered in 단풍, 메이플 syrup, folded in half twice, topped with triple 초콜릿 ice cream and whipped cream. Quite simple to make. If it's a small shop-bought pancake (Talk about lazy!), then 당신 don't have to fold it over.

Merangue nests
Everyone loves these (Or at least everone that's lived; 당신 haven't lived if 당신 haven't tried one and you're insane if 당신 hate them!) But what to put on/in them? Toffee ice cream, cream and mixed berries.

Chess 초콜릿 cake
A 초콜릿 cake with white iced squares to create a chess board. Use plastic peices to decorate in a checkmate.

Trifle
Budoir fingers, rasberry 젤리 with real rassberries trapped inside, custard and cream. What 더 많이 can I say?

Keep checking back for main courses, starters, breakfasts and more, but till then, BYE!
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posted by Problematic129
~Genre: Fiction, fantasy~
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    Abe
    I knew from the tensed shoulders, and the quick panicked looks around the area, that we were going to get into the paranormal discussions. It may not be smart to talk about it here, but we’ve always had been. I even found myself looking around the area for unwanted eavesdroppers.
    Once the coast was clear Alex cleared his throat. “Attendances took the note?”
    Zaria nodded. “Excused all of us, I was the last one to hand it to them but they told me to not bother,...
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posted by alicia386
Chapter 8: When People Lie, It's Usually For Your Own Safety

      It could be a little white lie 또는 a lie so giant that 당신 almost believed him. Remember the time when 당신 told your crush 당신 were into all the same things he was into? Lauren remembers a lie like that she once told Andrew. 또는 the time when 당신 lied and said 당신 work with the elderly. Simone remembers lying like that. 또는 the other time when 당신 스톨, 훔친 the 도서관, 라이브러리 book just because 당신 could and then 당신 lied and said 당신 had nothing to do with it. 또는 finally that lie so huge that everyone believed you. Sidney did tons of things...
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posted by alicia386
Chapter Seven: I Could Never Trust You

      "Oh my god," said Courtney, my story had left her speechless which was quite an accomplishment I my book. Courtney, Raven, Darrell and I were all seated in the school's library. It was a couple of hours after the break in. They cancelled the rest of the classes for the day. Darrell and I had found the rest of the school huddled together in the backyard. Several teachers were desperately trying to keep the students from reacting while searching the building for any enemies. I wanted to tell the staff but Darrell was against it. He instead let me...
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posted by alicia386
August 16

      Whispering crowds were everywhere as the latest 'it' man walked down the hallways. His swagger was undeniable and his charm was present. Every girl stared at him. They were both astonished 의해 the change and a bit curious about why it happened. It was obvious he was too cool to care about them. He wouldn't even look at them. Shea and Eric were right behind him as the three made their ways down the hall. 
      Shea's blonde hair was extra shiny today probably because of Corey who was making it prettier. Eric had the most whitest teeth and it was probably because of the awesomeness...
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Chapter four
Has it coming
Dr G was outraged. One of the students had escaped the school. It was on the news. That child has it coming alright. Dr G dialled the number on her smartphone…
Chapter 5
Back with the good guys
“Wait a minute, Hope, my phone’s ringing. Hello?” Prim answered her phone.
“Hello, little girl.” A wide grin spread across the caller’s face as the conversation started to pick up pace.
* * * * *
“Prim, I’m going to have to leave 당신 for a while, I hope 당신 don’t mind.” Hope said nervously.
“Oh, well that’s okay, I have things to do anyway” Prim answered....
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posted by Dhampires
"You ready for this?" I slide my other combat 장갑 onto my hand, with my other hand I reach in to my cargo pocket and recieve my dagger from it's sash. I rise it to the light and watch it's reflection bounce off the moonlight. "Ready." With that he was the first to hop out the tree, his gun loaded and cocked at his side-he was ready to take on anything. I followed I started to reach for my gun too but, he hald turned his head-toward me-and said "No not yet." I nodded and held the dagger at a certain distance and stood the same stance I'd been taught.

Taking in a big chuck of air I let it...
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posted by hgfan5602
We go 집 each 일 and think,
What do 당신 want to do?
We run upstairs, turn on the TV and say,
Hey, I'm bored, so whaddya wanna do???

So I don't do it the normal way, so what
Instead, I go 집 each 일 and I open up my list
Of how to save the world
I know it's childish, but what do 당신 care?

At least it's better than doing nothing at all
At least I do something than nothing at all
What? Call me naive, crazy, a baby, I don't care
No, I don't care about what 당신 say about me

Cuz I don't wake up every morning and say,
What's today? What's today?
What's tomorrow? What's tomorrow?
I just nod my head and say it's gonna be fine
Cuz it's a brand-new day
posted by alicia386
August 12

      It's Sunday afternoon as Corey Louis stares straight up at his ceiling. What was the point of getting up if 당신 had nothing better to do then to be bored 또는 die. It was a common thought he has been thinking since Friday evening when Blair didn't return any of his calls. She was probably too busy hanging out with the new girl, Chloe, then to be worried about him. He could just walk down the block to her house and demand why she wasn't answering his calls. That could probably upset her and there was always the possibility that she wasn't home. School was the only thing that...
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