please help i need to know if my songs are good enough

My world’s crumbling
This is the end it may be hard to get but it is true what it means do 당신 think it means I don’t care for 당신 Im stil there for 당신 always here
it tore me apart but I have to leave
It was everything I could ever want now its slipping now its going crumbling away my world is crumbling everything is so depressing so depressing
I know 당신 were always there but betrayal I cant forget it was pain hurt torture to try and live through it hurts 더 많이 than anything 당신 do
it tore me apart but i have to leave
It was everything I could ever want now its slipping now its going crumbling away my world is crumbling everything is so depressing so depressing
I thought it was but I fooled myself again I 사랑 당신 but that’s all I know I thought it was but I fooled myself again I 사랑 당신 but that’s all I know
it tore me apart but i have to leave
It was everything I could ever want now its slipping now its going crumbling away my world is crumbling everything is so depressing so depressing