it this ok (my mj poem)

in the literacy class 당신 had to make a poem about our 가장 좋아하는 artist. i suck at poems so i wanted to ask if this was ok it's ok if 당신 don't like it i'm just glade i was able to write a poem
it's called never forget
we miss 당신 everyday. Oh how people wish 당신 never went away. 당신 were one of the most precious gifts we'll ever know, but i guess it was your time to go. 당신 gave us years of beautiful music. that we'll always love, and we'll never forget that sparkly white glove. it's true 당신 were one of a kind. i'll never forget being six and watching 당신 moonwalk across a stage. i knew 당신 were extraordinary at the age. now years later 당신 are gone, but it's ok because everyone moves on to that better place. a place were 당신 don't have to deal with lies and hate. it's true 당신 will be strongly missed, becasue when michael jackson died the world cried, but we'll never forget