This is my first published fanfic of all time, so I really want feedback even if its negative.

Chapter 1: The Kidnapping

"I'm sorry I can't come this time, Snow, I've been postponing these meetings for weeks. My parents think I'm spending too much time with you."
Snow White laughed at her husband and kissed him on the cheek. "That's alright, I have Grumpy to take me to the cottage."
"That makes me feel much better." the prince said sarcastically.
"Hmph." Grumpy mumbled.
"I was only joking."
"Sure 당신 were."
They bid a last goodbye, Snow White and Grumpy dissapearing into the forest while the prince turned to walk back towards his castle. Before he stepped foot inside, he heard a voice in the distance shouting "Help." He looked all around, but didn't see anyone, so he started to follow what he heard. It lead him into the forest, and as he got closer, it sounded 더 많이 and 더 많이 like Snow White's voice. It echoed unnaturally through the forest, it was all around him now and he didn't know where to go.
"Snow? Snow White!"
He yelled her name as he watched the darkness crowd in on him. He wasn't afraid, only curious. It was like no darkness he'd ever seen; it must have been some sort of black magic chasing him. He realized it was a trap once he could no longer feel his body. He could feel himself leaving the oly world he knew. He was entering not a new world, but another dimension.


Aurora and Phillip were just about to go on a walk through the woods when a messenger came running towards them.
"Prince Phillip! Your father has urgently requested your presense!"
"Urgently? Is it really that important?"
"Yes, your Highness, very important."
Phillip whispered to Aurora, "He probably doesn'teven know what my father wants me for." He turned to the messenger. "I'll be there as soon as I can." He turned back to his wife. "Wait for me?"
"Yes, I'll wait." Aurora sighed as she let him 키스 her hand. She watched him mount his horse and he soon dissapeared beyond the 성 gates.
The messenger stood frozenly still for a moment, and Aurora noticed his eyes turn from black to a pale blue. He suddenly acted as if he didn't know where he was.
"Excuse me, princess, how long have I been standing here?"
"Aurora looked at him questionably. "Only a few minutes." She answered.
The messenger looked puzzled, but tryed to think nothing of it. He bowed to his princess and walked back to his post.
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Phillip raced out of his 성 and towards his father's kingdom. His father was never "urgent", so he didn't know whether it was actually serious 또는 if his father was suffering from lonelyness 또는 something. Whatever it was, it was shortening the time he had to spend with Aurora, and he had enough of that with his regular royal duties.
They were almost there now, Samson wasn't the least bit tired, which was why Phillip was completely off guard when Samson tripped and fell. Phillip went flying off of his horse and rammed into a tree. He heard Samson's cry and opened his eyes to see vines wrapped around his horse's ankles, dragging him into the forest. Although he was winded, Phillip sprung up to his feet and ran into the forrest. To his surprise, he felt a vine grip his ankle and he fell flat on his face. vine sprung out at his from all directions, eventually covering his entire body. He could only see darkness as the vines pulled him away.


Erik sat 의해 himself on the beach, staring into the rising sun. His father had recently died on his last trip out at sea, and his and Ariel's coorination was that evening. Everything was happening so fast, it was almost too much to handle. He was always a laid back kind of guy, but now that he was becoming King, he didn't know how to act 또는 what to say.
"You ok?"
Erik spun around, surprised to hear Ariel's voice.
"Yeah, just...thinking."
Ariel sat 다음 to him.
"Dad would've loved to see our coorination." Erik said.
"Yeah. Is that what you're thinking about?" Ariel asked.
"Partly. You're going to be a marvellous queen, I know it. It's just...I don't know abot me."
"You'll do fine, Erik."
"I know I'll do fine, but I want to do better than fine! I want to be as good a king as my father was."
At that moment, both Ariel and Erik felt water at their feet. The tide was rolling in early. Way early. They both grew suspicious, but niether of them had any idea of what was really happening. Without a warning sign, a giant black wave plunged over Erik, pulling him into the ocean. Ariel grabbed his hand and was too pulled into the vast ocean. Erik soon passed out, somehow able to breath underwater, and let go of Ariel's hand. The speed of the black water dragging Erik deeper into the ocean seperated them, forcing Ariel to swim to the surface and leaving her with the mystery of what happened to her soon-to-be-king.

Part 2 coming soon.