Hi... STILL new here, and I have a creative 글쓰기 camp over summer, and I was wondering if this is a good poem.

Cursed 의해 Marrisa Richards

When 당신 have been cursed, your life turns around. The skies tun gray and the 불, 화재 burns your soul.

No one can save 당신 from this darkness
Except yourself

Run, hide, hurry! Save yourself and don't get damaged

They will come for 당신 if 당신 are weak
They will come for 당신 if 당신 are strong

It's not a dream; nothing's ever a dream

So wake up

Now before they come

Now, 당신 have waited to long 당신 must let the beast feed into your soul.

Thanks!!!!!! :D

(Yeah it Doesn't rhyme but that's because its a SONG and it sounds so much better sung then read :])


I don't want to be a burden
But I can feel my life is burning
Someone please put out the flames

I can't take the heat
I need a cold release
I'm begging, put me down

I can't take the feeling
It's 더 많이 than I can handle
The flames too bright
Scorching my life
I need to feel nothing again

I try to grab the water
But color burns my eyes
I recede into the darkness
Where the pain isn't so high

I'm trapped inside the blaze
I'm trapped inside the blaze

당신 try to help. To heal
But all who try must pay
The 불, 화재 throws 당신 back
It owns me now
당신 run while 당신 still can

Cause I'm trapped inside the blaze
I'm trapped inside the blaze

I can't take the feeling
It's 더 많이 than I can handle
I choke on smokey air
I need to feel nothing again
But I will never get the privilege

I'm trapped inside the blaze (And I'll never get out)
I'm trapped inside the blaze
And I'll NEVER get out.