Well..
ZenJeager737 has asked me to review his story JASPER HELL HIGH..
To be honest, I don't usually have high hopes for the fanfiction stories of these days.
The alpha and omega Fanfiction.net page will never completely be the same as it was 3 또는 4 years ago.
All those people I've come know, are gone now, and I barelly come to this page anymore I read other pages, and review most of the stories from back in the day..
But anyway.
This story was better then I expected, though that probably isn't saying much, I wasn't expecting much.
I like the way it keeps switching between P.O.V's so rapidly, I don't think I've seen that before.
And as for the story itself. Not sure if I have anything worth saying.
But that's pretty common now.
I wish I could say their's no sex. But truth is.. I couldn't tell.
Its rated M so it's very likely. But I hope to god there isn't.. But the hope of 'nice' stories is becoming harder and harder these days.
But anyway..
Sorry for not ranting, swearing, 또는 giving a better review.
This is all I could do.
Zen asked me to point out spelling mistakes also, but I don't think I'll be the best for that. Considering I suck at it myself and don't want to sound hypercritical..
Anyway..
Till 다음 time.
Live long and prosper!
ZenJeager737 has asked me to review his story JASPER HELL HIGH..
To be honest, I don't usually have high hopes for the fanfiction stories of these days.
The alpha and omega Fanfiction.net page will never completely be the same as it was 3 또는 4 years ago.
All those people I've come know, are gone now, and I barelly come to this page anymore I read other pages, and review most of the stories from back in the day..
But anyway.
This story was better then I expected, though that probably isn't saying much, I wasn't expecting much.
I like the way it keeps switching between P.O.V's so rapidly, I don't think I've seen that before.
And as for the story itself. Not sure if I have anything worth saying.
But that's pretty common now.
I wish I could say their's no sex. But truth is.. I couldn't tell.
Its rated M so it's very likely. But I hope to god there isn't.. But the hope of 'nice' stories is becoming harder and harder these days.
But anyway..
Sorry for not ranting, swearing, 또는 giving a better review.
This is all I could do.
Zen asked me to point out spelling mistakes also, but I don't think I'll be the best for that. Considering I suck at it myself and don't want to sound hypercritical..
Anyway..
Till 다음 time.
Live long and prosper!
CHAPTER 1:On one fall afternoon me and Kate woke up first before i did.And she said to me:wake up sleepy head"she whispered.so i did wake up from my sleep and i said:good afternoon Kate."and she'd replied to me:good after to 당신 Humphrey".then we started to walk down the 언덕, 힐 and wait for the pack to come with us and as they came to stop beside us and they said:so are we hunting today?"and i said:yes we are!"so we started to wait for a an ambush for the caribou and we got one caribou and take back to the 굴, 덴 and ate it. the end of this part!see 더 많이 on www.fanpop.com/alpha and omega/articles.enjoy this one!see 당신 guys there!slydog117.(best friend).
later
humphreys pov
it was the ultiment showndown which was part of the ultiment destiny 늑대 늑대 and 더 많이 늑대 as far the eye can see and it could go on for a century necks begin bitten and legs torn off it was the bloodiest battle that the world ever saw but was won easily "its over we won" humphrey said "yes its over (panting)" kate said
kates pov
the battle is over and the pups are at the parents 굴, 덴 "hey huphrey i'm bored can we have fun (giggles)" kate said "sure" humphrey said he began to mount me slow and soft and graudaly sped and made me climax 5 time and we finished when he climaxed and we cleanded up picked the kids up and headed 집 but the sky began to rip apart and everything was sucked in
THE END!!!!!
humphreys pov
it was the ultiment showndown which was part of the ultiment destiny 늑대 늑대 and 더 많이 늑대 as far the eye can see and it could go on for a century necks begin bitten and legs torn off it was the bloodiest battle that the world ever saw but was won easily "its over we won" humphrey said "yes its over (panting)" kate said
kates pov
the battle is over and the pups are at the parents 굴, 덴 "hey huphrey i'm bored can we have fun (giggles)" kate said "sure" humphrey said he began to mount me slow and soft and graudaly sped and made me climax 5 time and we finished when he climaxed and we cleanded up picked the kids up and headed 집 but the sky began to rip apart and everything was sucked in
THE END!!!!!
It was close to midnight, there were no sounds in the forest exept the static coming from alpha 3's communicator.
Alpha 1: "Alpha 3 what's your location. over."
Alpha 3: "I'm about 5 clicks from the-"
Alpha 4: "THIS IS ALPHA 4 I NEED HELP NOW! GAAAHH..."
Alpha 1: "ALPHA 4 COME IN OVER."
Alpha 3: "Sir 당신 need to get to the rondezvous, there's somthing 당신 need to see. over."
Alpha 1: "And what is that Alpha 3?"
Alpha 3: "you wouldn't belive me if i told you."
Writers note: it's not the best story in the world. in the 코멘트 tell me if 당신 think i should make chapter one of "Alpha Team"
Alpha 1: "Alpha 3 what's your location. over."
Alpha 3: "I'm about 5 clicks from the-"
Alpha 4: "THIS IS ALPHA 4 I NEED HELP NOW! GAAAHH..."
Alpha 1: "ALPHA 4 COME IN OVER."
Alpha 3: "Sir 당신 need to get to the rondezvous, there's somthing 당신 need to see. over."
Alpha 1: "And what is that Alpha 3?"
Alpha 3: "you wouldn't belive me if i told you."
Writers note: it's not the best story in the world. in the 코멘트 tell me if 당신 think i should make chapter one of "Alpha Team"