Is this good?

I just saw a 질문 asking if their song was good so I'm copying them. I wrote this last night:

I can only see 당신 in my mind
I can’t show myself
I hide inside
I just want to be free of this
Fall into my arms

All I see is a cloudy sky
A song made just for you
I hope 당신 hear my voice
Above the chaos of the world

You’re my savior
I want 당신 to know this
You’re the light when all others are out
You’re my sunlight
You’re my stars at night
I see you’re beautiful

I don’t understand
당신 don’t see how amazing 당신 are
Others don’t realize
But I see the light in your soul

You’re the smile when I cry
You’re the air when I’m drowning
You’re my water when I’m wilting
And you’re my best friend when I’m lonely

You’re my savior
I want 당신 to know this
You’re the light when all others are out
You’re my sunlight
You’re my stars at night
I see you’re beautiful

If 당신 say you’re ugly
I’ll make 당신 feel better
I know you’re unhappy
But maybe I’m sadder

If I try to fix your broken heart
Will it heal me 또는 break me more?
I think it might hurt me if I can’t
But if only 당신 knew me

You’re my savior
I want 당신 to know this
You’re the light when all others are out
You’re my sunlight
You’re my stars at night
I see you’re beautiful

I’d do anything for you
You’re the only hope in my life
Without 당신 I don’t think I could survive
But if 당신 see me you’ll forget me

I know I’m just another person on the street
But maybe now you’ll know me

You’re my savior
I want 당신 to know this
You’re the light when all others are out
You’re my sunlight
You’re my stars at night
I see you’re beautiful