Help!

I wrote this song today. Is It good?

Oh, do 당신 know,
I used to look up to you,
I felt I had found someone,
But I was mistaken,
And did 당신 know,
If I could see 당신 face to face,
And I’d be speaking for the aliens,
I’d tell you,
I hate you!
Don’t mind how 당신 look,
I know you’ve grown up,
I hate you!
You’re just scared of us,
And if I told 당신 the truth,
I’d just call 당신 a wimp,
Are 당신 afraid of me?
I hate to put all the blame on you,
But it really is your fault,
당신 wanted to become a Hollywood star,
If I could see 당신 face to face,
Here’s just what I would say,
Why did 당신 have to change?
Why couldn’t 당신 just stay?
And I honestly wouldn’t cry,
If I heard that 당신 had just dropped dead,
I hate you!
당신 probably don’t even know,
This song is for you,
What’s the point of this song?
I know 당신 won’t listen,
You’re an arrogant jerk,
Thought 당신 were an alien,
I guess after all this time,
당신 got your wish,
당신 belong.