PLEASE HELP!

I'm trying to send this poem to my uncle, who is an English teacher, he has left, and I might never see him again, please help me add a few lines, 또는 replace some of the words, because I think this poem looks so simple, also if I had any grammer mistakes, please tell me.
and tell me what do u think of it :)


a paper and a pen which writes in blue.

I hold it and think.
what should I do?

write about love?friends? 또는 write about you?

the last thought was the best.
but where do I start?
I had no clue.

thoughts are many.
but words are few.

so I remembered the old days.
it was not a long time ago.

how 당신 came to our house.
and how did 당신 go.

I remember everything.
your face, smile, clothes, and even your shoe!

everything 당신 said was interesting.
and so funny too!

and within a few days only.
I realized
당신 are the best relative I've ever knew.

don't 당신 believe me? I swear! it's true!
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I loved it all! except the shoot part ._.
InvaderStickly posted over a year ago
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"shoot" ?? I wrote "shoe"
hindaa posted over a year ago
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thank u all :) that's very nice of u :)
hindaa posted over a year ago
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irena83 said:
That's very nice of you. To send a message full of 사랑 and tenderness. Your poem is very sweet, don't worry, tho 당신 may add some special moments of yours, something that will be memorized and cherished.
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i agree
chattycandy posted over a year ago
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thanks :)
hindaa posted over a year ago
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Thank you. ;)
irena83 posted over a year ago
CourtneyFan17 said:
I didn't read it sorry I got bored :P
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u r so mean :P
hindaa posted over a year ago
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Not trying to thats why I said sorry :P
CourtneyFan17 posted over a year ago
chattycandy said:
it shows 당신 사랑 him and that 당신 care.if 당신 like it he will too.
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Words itself mean a lot. Honest and soft words always make everyone feel good.
irena83 posted over a year ago
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yeah
chattycandy posted over a year ago
booklover27 said:
AWSOME!! I loved it! there are no grammer problems that I can detect and sometimes the simplest things can be the best! I don't think 당신 need to add anything, its sounds perfect and amazing! :)
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unless 당신 want to add anything else of course! I agree with irena83's idea if 당신 do :)
booklover27 posted over a year ago
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thanks :)
hindaa posted over a year ago
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Yeah,simple and honest things mean a lot. The power and the depth is in words itself.
irena83 posted over a year ago
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