is this good?

당신 monster who broke, who is breaking, who is broken,
who kills for no reason at all,
당신 hurt her, 당신 know, maybe ruined her life,
yet 당신 sit here and watch her die slowly inside


(it is about a boy who cheated on his girlfriend, and broke her heart)
 alicegirl309 posted over a year ago
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KorIMoriTsuki said:
it's..............alright, i mean..... it could flow with a bit 더 많이 detail.......other than that it's a good start.....
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I agree!
Persephone16 posted over a year ago
iL0veJB said:
very good
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pokeyanimal said:
It's very good!
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tyler4ever said:
3 out of 5 :D
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