DEMIGOD SONG (TOMORROW 의해 NIC CESTER)

Here is chapter two, 코멘트 please

(Still Jason's point of view)

Jason watched as the ship came to shore, the figure jumped from his spot and landed cleanly on his feet. Jason asked "who are you?" The man replied "name's Sinbad, yours?" Piper took over and said "I'm Piper, that's Jason, and that's Leo." Sinbad looked at them, and he asked "your demigods right?" Jason nodded and said "I'm the son of Zeus, and Piper is the daughter of Aphrodite, and Leo is the son of Hephaestus." Sinbad replied "pleased to meet you." It was quit for a moment an then Jason asked "would 당신 like a tour of the camp...

저기요 guys!! I'll be uh posting a 미리 보기 of the fanfiction I'm gonna post. Basically a crossover. Just tell me what 당신 think of it, and I'll post the rest as soon as I'm done. [Hi book-worm!! *waves] So yeah. There. After this. Hah. Okay.



1. SADIE: Camp...Strawberry Services?!

Hey – okay, wait a second…[taps on microphone] 저기요 Carter! Is this thing working? What – of course I’m asking you! You’re the nerd here! [silence] Oh, ah, I see the tiny red light. Never mind, it’s working!
 

Okay, let me start that introduction in a better way. Ahem. Long time no see, mates! Sadie Kane is back,...

Annabeth

I was walking through the 왕좌, 왕위 room, talking to my mother, Athena. Yes, the goddess of wisdom and war strategy. We were admiring my work.

"Very good Annabeth. I'm glad to say my own daughter is-- A SPIDER!!!!"
I looked at Athena, confused. I'm not a spider! That's when she pointed to her statue and screamed.

I cringed, then looked at the statue. How bad could it be? The worst thing that could happen is it could be a- "SPIDER!!" I screamed.

I looked at my mother, terrified. Her grey eyes were wide, full of fear.
"DON'T LOOK AT ME!! GO GET SOMETHING SO WE CAN KILL THIS DESPICABLE THING!"...

저기요 guys, i was just wondering, judging 의해 this prologue, would read my fanfic if i wrote one? now, im not saying that i'll actually be 글쓰기 one, cuz i have a really busy summer, but i just want your opinion of it. like, is it any good? I would HIGHLY appreciate constructive critiscim. i want 당신 to nit-pick. Spelling mistakes, grammar, choppy 또는 awkward sentences, run-on sentences, being too descriptive, out-of-character thoughts 또는 actions, stupid/weak ideas, anything! just be polite about it :)
PS: i know, its a bit long for a prologue, but i couldnt help myself!

And voila! Here it is:

The...

ANYONE MAY READ THIS AS LONG AS THEY DON'T MIND SPOILERS FROM HOH!

HERE IS MY POINT-I THINK LEO IS GOING TO DIE! THERE! I SAID IT( I just killed my self doing so but) I SAID IT!

sorry for making this so short but this all i could think of so far..

here is my proof-

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Gaia said that she would get her revenge-
i know this doesn't count as much as she said that to everyone but she thinks that he is the one to die first. She has been plotting his death for much longer. what if this is because she knows that he is also the one to stop HER?! That...