How do you like chapter one? I have no idea if it's too long or too short but i just made it up as i was goi ng along.

Well i like this but to short of chappie

Yeah. I thought so, I'm working on writing somemore now. Hopefully i can post soon(later today).

Chapter 1 part 2 enjoy!
In my dream I was standing in the middle of a very large field. It was dark and GIGANTIC, seriously. It was packed with things i thought as people making strange chattering noises. In the distance i saw a girl with darkish colored hair sitting on a stump in the ditance. She was pulling precious metals and jewles out of the dark field-like earth. After they popped into her hand she would examine them, and throw them one by one into the distance. Once she hit one of the strange people like things wanding around. It chattered angirly then walked away exasperated. The girl just sighed. As i walked closer to her i noticed her old fasioned hair stlye it made me wounder how long she'd been here. i went to go to talk to her but stopped seeing something out of the cornor of my eye coming this direction. The girl looked surprised as a boy with very pale white skin and dark clothes ran up to her. She dropped the jewels and other precices metals of the earth onto the ground as she stood to face the strange boy. "Hazel?" he asked. The girl Hazel just nodded and said "who are you?". The boy grabbed her hand and said "i am Nico, son of Hades your brother and we kinda need to get out of her like asap". The boy said acompanied by three herendios screeches. "like yeah lets go right now". Nico said before Hazel could protest. They ran quickly and quickly disapeared from veiw. Then the scene shifted. It was me, but i looked older, more powerfull i was holding a magnificent bronze bow with a quiver packed full with arrows. I was on an archery range wearin jean shirts and a tee shirt that said Camp H- i could not make out the rest of the word Blood. Well thats a weird name for a camp i thought. In the dream i knocked an arrow and let it fly. It was a perfect bullseye right in the middle of the target. I looked around to see i was alone. The boy Nico from my other dream was there, he was a little bit older than he had in the dream though. I smiled, ran forward, and gave him a big hug. It made me wonder if we had a thing going in the dream. Then a very pretty girl with a choppy haircut like it was done with a saftey scissors. "Hey Piper" dream me said. "hey Lisa" she smiled a perfect white smile.  " So uh, when is the Argo II taking off for New Rome?" i asked. Piper smiled again. "Tommorow actully, i came to say goodbye." she said. "And Nico's coming with." "Oh." I said my smile fading. Someone opened there mouth to speak but it was all blackness. "Its time to go demigod". A raspy devilish voice said. Then I awoke to A pounding at my door. "Lisa wake up!" my 6 year old half brother scrceetched. "I'm up! I'm up!" i screemed back, rolling out of bed. It was going to be a long week.

Tell me what you think!!

Awesome story! :D
There are some really good parts, and you have a great imagination (Which every writer needs!).
I think, if you could perfect your grammer and puncuation, it would help the reader to understand your story better.
Good start! I hope you get many readers! ^-^
Just remember to have fun and don't abandon this story! :P

~ Phoenix

Thx Phenix I'll take what u said into consideration. Btw my teacher last year said I'm nuts and have a big imaginantion. :D

^Lol xD
She speaks the truth! ^.^

Constructive criticism here: *Warning might be a bitch*
First of all, you spelled fanfic wrong. That kind of concerns me.
Your spelling and grammar needs improvement. Its atrocious.
That is not longer. Its still a little bit more than a paragraph.
You need to learn the concept of line spacing. And how to correctly use dialogue.
Other than that it was original and lol you know how to use first person:D