can 당신 guys tell me what 당신 think of this?

this is a chapter of a mabe soon to be story of mine and befire i deside if i should write 더 많이 i was wondering what 당신 think and if 당신 would read a 초 chapter and is it stupied and can 당신 rate and 코멘트 there and answer too please and thank you.


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