Would 당신 read a story....

...that was about a family of 12 people who live in a country that was once the ruins of Europe, but is now called Isban and they all represent the 12 동물 of the chinese zodiac. They once lived in East Asia, but their village was taken over 의해 Isban but they refused to be slaves, so they fled. They are now running from the government 의해 themselves. They're half Isbanian (European) and half Asian. They all speak the language of their old village, Runis.

Should I even make this story? Does it need work? What should I change about it? Is it perfect the way it is? Please add your thoughts on it. I would greatly appreciate it.