What do 당신 think of this poem?

The ocean

He gives me a smile,
he allows me to fly.
I’m flying like a bird,
free and placid.
He gives me a strength,
i give him my mind.
My 심장 is full of his thoughts,
full of his brightness,
full of his silence.
But still,he’s like the ocean,
so deep and mysterious,
당신 can not find his soul
unless it finds you.
And i’m so 메리다와 마법의 숲 and such a coward
the same time,
i need him 더 많이 and more,
and i’m scared,
oh i’m scared for he found my soul.
Don’t blind your eyes not to see,
don’t trap your mind not to feel.
Oh, i wish to touch his hair gently,
oh, i wish to calm in his embrace.
I want him to see it in my eyes,
to feel that my 사랑
will never betray him,
and i want him to be what he is already,
himself.

 What do 당신 think of this poem?
 irena83 posted over a year ago
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CB4evaGiggles said:
haha, wow, i think its really good!
=D
great job!
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Thank you. :)
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torriebee said:
wow thats soo good~ 당신 could have a cool slide show while 읽기 this haha
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LOL Thanks sweetie. ♥
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Lovetreehill said:
Great one ! I 사랑 it !
You're a good writer Irena, never give up ;)
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Thank 당신 honey. I won't! :*
irena83 posted over a year ago
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I hope that :)
Lovetreehill posted over a year ago
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♥ ♥ ♥
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Spi_Kat_Penguin said:
I ♥ It, ...wow....I cant describe my feelings as im reading...Its very good...

-Spi
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Thank 당신 so much. ♥
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RavenRox2 said:
that's amazing!! I 사랑 it!! <333
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~ Thank you. ~
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your welcome!! :]]
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sugarsweet076 said:
i 사랑 it!!! great job!!!
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:) Thanks. :)
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clanbillr said:
I'm not much of a poet but I like it!! It makes me think how very calm, but with a small ripple and then ruthless the ocean can be!!
Thank 당신 for the poem!!!
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 I'm not much of a poet but I like it!! It makes me think how very calm, but with a small ripple and then ruthless the ocean can be!! Thank 당신 for the poem!!!
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Aw thank you. :)
irena83 posted over a year ago
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Oh yes, the ocean can be calm and ruthless the same time,mysterious.
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Sure. I will. :)
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MrOrange16 said:
Its so beautiful! *sniff*
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Thank you. ;)
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heyitssmarsx3 said:
that's an excellent poem, good job!!
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Thank you. ♥
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gossiprincess said:
waw this is an awsum poem!=D
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jem_ said:
i enjoyed 읽기 it, really raw and lovely :)
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thank you. ♥
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juicyjossy9 said:
Scared to be scarred... I've been there. Like many of us humans. 당신 touched me right on the spot. Don't worry, it does not make me sad. To the contrary, it reminds me what makes my 심장 beat, so blindly true and so human to be close to my emotions. Craving to 사랑 and be loved 의해 a loved one is ALL THERE IS. Thanks for posting this. 당신 make my day. If 당신 don't mind, it will now be part of my "Treasures" book. jj9
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Thank 당신 so much. ♥ Of course i don't mind,i'm delighted. ♥
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LunaShay said:
Its....beautiful :') if my 모토 was big enough,i would put this on there!
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LOL thanks. :)
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Pikafan32 said:
Are 당신 gonna name all of them 'What do 당신 think of this poem?'

No... just kidding

Anyways the real review

It was really good. One of your better works, but not the best. Have 당신 ever tried a murder poem, 또는 a happy one. I'm fine with the style 당신 have now, but from experience I would have to say that it's easier to write your own genre if 당신 try others.

- Re Re
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LOL Yes you're right,it is easier to write your own genre. Well who knows, i might try something new. LOL
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Mallory101 said:
사랑 it! ♥
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thank you. :)
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gaby124 said:
your poem is so good i can´t find the words to describe it! If ur dream is to be a writer then 당신 have a very good chance of being such a wonderful and amazing writer!!! keep on following ur dreams!! : )
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aw thank 당신 so much and thanks for the support. ♥
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